I think the second person can be a very powerful device, and certainly allows for effects that would be much harder (or impossible) to achieve otherwise. It's just more volatile at the same time. Mostly it's when I get an author-disguised-as-second-person vibe that I really want to punch through the page, poke the author in the eye and scream, "If you're really talking about yourself, say 'I,' dammit!" But hey, I fall into the trap myself -- it's easy to do.

Anyway, I'm happy if this article helped at all. Maybe you could post the story here when it's finished, in diary-space or via a link?

--ich sage nicht, was ich will, sondern was die Sprache will--
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