I've only just now read your article and the outline of your story. To elaborate on jason's suggestion of getting at "the point" of the story, I'd ask, what is it about the Law and about Religion that Chad is opposing? What aspect(s) of the modern world he is most at odds with? I imagine once you put your finger on what that is -- what he cannot be reconciled with -- that will point you to a natural event that will put him over the edge. Maybe you've already got this in your head but haven't stated it, in which case you just need to figure out how best to highlight it.

--ich sage nicht, was ich will, sondern was die Sprache will--
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